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Post by holland25 on Sept 4, 2010 14:32:29 GMT -6
So I decided to write a new poem, after a year of inactivity. CALIFORNIANI should've helped you when you were down we should've laughed but I made you frown I should've known you weren't joking Instead I turned and kept on walking. And now you're gone for an unknown reason I might be pathetic, but I call it treason I was too lazy to give you a helping hand and now it's too late, but I finally understand... ...that you were the broken one you used to talk about You were the lonely girl feeling down and out You left without leaving note, but you still live in my heart You closed the book of tragedy in which I played my part. You left me here with memories, a paper and a pen With bittersweet experience that made me a new man So thanks for all the times we had, enjoy your better place and I'll keep my heart bound to the photo of your face. First of all, I'm not EMO and this is not my personal experience. Second, why is it called Californian? Association with this: en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SS_Californian
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Post by MyNameWasTaken on Sept 4, 2010 15:14:05 GMT -6
i love it... every thing my poerty teacher is looking for. lolz
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Post by MyNameWasTaken on Sept 8, 2010 6:24:07 GMT -6
Seriously, Matúš, are you published anywhere?
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Post by holland25 on Sept 8, 2010 13:30:40 GMT -6
No, I'm an underground indie artist.
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Post by offsprincess on Sept 11, 2010 12:04:58 GMT -6
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Post by MyNameWasTaken on Sept 11, 2010 14:53:37 GMT -6
yay good job matus xD I was thinking to make a thread for my poems too but i dunno im afraid my english poems will make u laugh at me i won't laugh at you... seriously, you can't be any worse than i am
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Post by kaiden69roses on Oct 28, 2010 9:07:07 GMT -6
I love how you used allegory/fugurative language. Making it seem like regret for a relationship gone sour or for knowing someone was contemplating suicide and not doing anything about it, just letting them die. I must say; this is my new favorite poem.
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Post by holland25 on Nov 12, 2010 14:56:08 GMT -6
That is exactly what the poem is about
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Post by MyNameWasTaken on Nov 23, 2010 12:56:06 GMT -6
Looks like not all teenagers are total goofs Good Job, Kaiden. Seriously, Matus.... You should seriously think about getting this published. I'd hate to see someone else find it and take credit for it.
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Post by jim109109 on Dec 8, 2010 18:17:03 GMT -6
Look guys, I just invented a poem
CALIFORNIAN
I should've helped you when you were down we should've laughed but I made you frown I should've known you weren't joking Instead I turned and kept on walking.
And now you're gone for an unknown reason I might be pathetic, but I call it treason I was too lazy to give you a helping hand and now it's too late, but I finally understand...
...that you were the broken one you used to talk about You were the lonely girl feeling down and out You left without leaving note, but you still live in my heart You closed the book of tragedy in which I played my part.
You left me here with memories, a paper and a pen With bittersweet experience that made me a new man So thanks for all the times we had, enjoy your better place and I'll keep my heart bound to the photo of your face.
First of all, I'm not EMO and this is not my personal experience. Second, why is it called Californian?
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